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Winter is a blank slate,
but not like Rousseau's—
it cleanses
sucking out warmth like poison
leaving only windburnt frost
tacked to the window pane

all we remember
is the numbness
the shuddering
skittish steps across the ice
snowflakes pasted to our faces
smoke rising from our lips
dragged across bleak clouds

winter has us captured
bound by fur and walls
drifting in our eggshelled silence

bone cold until we birth ourselves by warmth
emerge from our shells wet and heaving
uncurl our fingers one by one
joints crackling like fire at our backs

until spring comes
drip by tender drip
old wounds thaw
we are found raw,
graced again by feeling.
Written back in Spring 2011. I forgot I hadn't posted it yet. :blushes:

Another from my poetry class that turned out to be rather promising. That winter was a LONG one, but at least it gave me plenty of inspiration!

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1. How is the flow of the poem?
2. Do the images carry?
3. Favorite part?

As always, thank you for the comments!

Edit: Wow! :O Another Daily Deviation! I'm extremely grateful, especially to *Mrs-Freestar-Bul for the suggestion and ^thorns for the feature. Many thanks to all who commented and fav'd as well! :heart:
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Given 2012-11-28
Dormant by ~dull-glitter ( Suggested by Mrs-Freestar-Bul and Featured by thorns )
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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dull-glitter Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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ME-inator Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
I can see the images your words convey as clear as day! My favorite line is, "smoke rising from our lips
dragged across bleak clouds".

Congrats on your DD! :love:
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:icondull-glitter:
dull-glitter Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart: Glad you enjoyed reading it!
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Craazhy Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Professional Writer
I didn't like this when it started, but by the time it ended I thought it was a masterpiece. I think it was only a fault in my personal taste. Please, carry on. :)
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dull-glitter Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart: Glad you enjoyed reading.
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STACIEJONES Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
That about sums it up in a nutshell.........Couldn't have said it better myself (then again - not a poet)....But have SAD - so I feel as though you wrote for me! 5 STARS
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dull-glitter Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart: I'm glad you connected with the poem!
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InsomniaSquared Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful
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dull-glitter Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
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